YOU UPDATED :DDDDD And I know I said I wouldn't quote...but I failed, so I quote less? :]
The accident that ostracised him hadn't happened too long after that. Okay so I should be commenting on other parts of the first section, such as how intense Ryo's love is for Shige and how convinced he was that Shige was the center of his life, but instead I focus on how you tease me in the beginning only to reveal what happens later on in the chapter. I-I'm just sort of sad at how Ryo's life turns out. He lives out his life with the hopes that the day he dies will eventually be his freedom. I think I told you how much I love that your fic is about relationships. The familial relationship in this chapter was horrible. Father to son, son to Mother, Step-mother to son, and siblings to sibling. Ryo never had a chance. And he's right, he was only 14. How much are you expected at that age to be able to do? It was an accident, those happen and if you're lucky they aren't life endangering ones. I wish that the bonds of love for a child not your own were the same as for your own blood born child. Sometimes that's the case but apparently not with his stepmother, which really is the most painful part. This woman, whom Ryo came to love and treasure like his own mother, just gives him a blank look. Not even an angry look or a hateful one, but a blank one. Devoid of any emotion.
But Ryo never felt himself in danger; he loved kicking up into the air, watching his feet meet the sky. He wasn't silly enough to want to turn a 360 degree circle, but he liked going as fast and as high as he could. He wanted the world to keep moving at breakneck speed around him. I used to do this a lot. The swings were my absolute favorite section at the playgrounds. I used to think if I swung high enough, I could fly. Childhood innocence huh? For Ryo it was his escape, where he was unrestrained by his parents and the sadness of his life. It's an awesome feeling, for those few seconds where you swing high enough up in the air to feel breathless and free.
Ryo stared at the stranger in the photograph and all he could feel was hatred…an unreasonable resentment against this woman who somehow managed to cause him suffering even after she was gone. I know you said Ryo was beat as a child by his father, but I think the kind of verbal abuse you described was even worse. Psychologically the words remain in your head, having the repetition of "worthless", "piece of shit" and "crap" hanging over your head for the rest of your life is pretty daunting. No wonder Ryo embraced the warmth and love that Shige provided so greedily. Can't blame him for loving so intensely and passionately but the fact that that was also his downfall is painful.
I fell for you like a child. This sentence sort of sums it up perfectly. Ryo's emotional mentality is that of a child. The last time he ever experienced love for someone and love in return was when he was just a child. He doesn't know how to deal/handle with his love for Shige. And like a child, he loved immediately and without a moment's hesitance. He placed all his trust in Shige and in his eyes, Shige was it, there was nothing else, just Shige.
:D I don't think my comment this time is that long. I'm still in class and should be paying attention to how to properly dissect a fetal pig but I don't really care xDD And the fact that you updated totally drew my attention away x] I'm working on mine...I didn't get much of a chance to continue cos of CNY preparations/celebrations :[ Miss you boo ♥♥
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Date: 2009-01-26 08:24 pm (UTC)The accident that ostracised him hadn't happened too long after that.
Okay so I should be commenting on other parts of the first section, such as how intense Ryo's love is for Shige and how convinced he was that Shige was the center of his life, but instead I focus on how you tease me in the beginning only to reveal what happens later on in the chapter. I-I'm just sort of sad at how Ryo's life turns out. He lives out his life with the hopes that the day he dies will eventually be his freedom. I think I told you how much I love that your fic is about relationships. The familial relationship in this chapter was horrible. Father to son, son to Mother, Step-mother to son, and siblings to sibling. Ryo never had a chance. And he's right, he was only 14. How much are you expected at that age to be able to do? It was an accident, those happen and if you're lucky they aren't life endangering ones. I wish that the bonds of love for a child not your own were the same as for your own blood born child. Sometimes that's the case but apparently not with his stepmother, which really is the most painful part. This woman, whom Ryo came to love and treasure like his own mother, just gives him a blank look. Not even an angry look or a hateful one, but a blank one. Devoid of any emotion.
But Ryo never felt himself in danger; he loved kicking up into the air, watching his feet meet the sky. He wasn't silly enough to want to turn a 360 degree circle, but he liked going as fast and as high as he could. He wanted the world to keep moving at breakneck speed around him.
I used to do this a lot. The swings were my absolute favorite section at the playgrounds. I used to think if I swung high enough, I could fly. Childhood innocence huh? For Ryo it was his escape, where he was unrestrained by his parents and the sadness of his life. It's an awesome feeling, for those few seconds where you swing high enough up in the air to feel breathless and free.
Ryo stared at the stranger in the photograph and all he could feel was hatred…an unreasonable resentment against this woman who somehow managed to cause him suffering even after she was gone.
I know you said Ryo was beat as a child by his father, but I think the kind of verbal abuse you described was even worse. Psychologically the words remain in your head, having the repetition of "worthless", "piece of shit" and "crap" hanging over your head for the rest of your life is pretty daunting. No wonder Ryo embraced the warmth and love that Shige provided so greedily. Can't blame him for loving so intensely and passionately but the fact that that was also his downfall is painful.
I fell for you like a child.
This sentence sort of sums it up perfectly. Ryo's emotional mentality is that of a child. The last time he ever experienced love for someone and love in return was when he was just a child. He doesn't know how to deal/handle with his love for Shige. And like a child, he loved immediately and without a moment's hesitance. He placed all his trust in Shige and in his eyes, Shige was it, there was nothing else, just Shige.
:D I don't think my comment this time is that long. I'm still in class and should be paying attention to how to properly dissect a fetal pig but I don't really care xDD And the fact that you updated totally drew my attention away x] I'm working on mine...I didn't get much of a chance to continue cos of CNY preparations/celebrations :[ Miss you boo ♥♥