I love in firs part how Hyukjae goes back to work and how he thinks of it, like this place shares the same space with Donghae's bakery and he thinks about him fondly even though he's coming back to be prostitute... I love how heartbreaking it sounds..
I love in the second part how Henry tells Hyukjae's story and how Donghae gets angry and he remembers his first time in red light districts. I actually made my boyfriend to read this little part from my translation ("look! Just look how amazing she writes!!") because it was so good how he was scared, but still ended up in bed with Hyukjae because Hyukjae was just so amazing mueheheheh And in the same part, RED LIPS! Seriously, that was such a good scene! I felt all of this, the Donghae's sadness and his jealousy and inside conflicts... Ah, my memories. I remember how I felt nervous during that scene. I clearly felt how sad it was to have such a beautiful person in front of you and how disturbing it is to think that this person was just making out with somebody else…for money.
The third part is their life stories and it was all good but the best was how you managed to put their (especially Donghae's) denial, like he was not going to end up with Hyukjae, he was in love but he was going to leave him some day with no regrets but he didn't remember about his plan when he was waiting for Hyukjae to show up. And second, how you explained Hyukjae's feelings toward his job... This was great. No breaking minds, nothing pathological, just pure money and sense of power. I love it! And still, he let himself to think this beautiful thing: I never knew it could be like this until I met you.
Part four... I'll only say that I was amazed how Donghae was sure that Hyukjae is hurt and it actually turned out to be true. I was sure the explanation of his absence is going be different.. But it showed how Donghae trusted Hyukjae and he knew the other wouldn't leave him like that.. And there’s their fight. It was amazing, such a good scene, I was all nervous and sad, I bite all of my nails.. And if I can comment about translation problems, I was thinking for whole 4 days how to translate the last sentence coming from Donghae's mouths (the one about whorish life..) because I wanted so badly to sound as good and harsh and heartbreaking in Polish. After reading this fic so many times (well, if not counting translating process that would be about 30 times..) this scene still amazes me. I felt so bad for Hyukjae. He was so hurt, you know. You did this scene so perfectly, because they both wanted to be close to each other at the moment AND yet they end up broken. Amazing… When Hyukjae said that he only wanted to be held for Donghae and Donghae then said fuck you… This was just unbelievable how sad, yet somehow beautiful it all sounded.
AND! I really need to thank you for part five which you made from Hyukjae’s POV, because first I don’t think I would like to have sobbing Donghae through the whole chapter, and second I really love Hyukjae in it. He is just.. stunning, you know? Sorry for saying that, but he suffers beautifully. He isn’t this messy ball of misery; he is proud and really hard, he can get over everything, even if Donghae was little piece of shit, he hurt him and didn’t understand him and yet Hyukjae is saying such good things about him to Pierre. “He's the first person I've ever felt passion for” – I think it’s my favourite line from the whole story. And when Donghae comes to his apartment I was hoping for happy ending right there. But no, you did something even better. The whole scene which begins with this awful sex act with no emotions and Hyukjae lies there so submissively.. Really, I have no words for it. It was much much worse than Donghae saying those harsh words before, because I almost felt how disappointed Hyukjae had to be.. Really, I don’t know how Donghae went this far, but I wanted to slap him really hard. But for the reader it’s even better, because later when they make love it’s even more beautiful, you know. And how they can’t get enough of each other, how they need to be close and they say those I love yous and you know.. This scene was so freaking great! My heart melted to the floor.
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I love in firs part how Hyukjae goes back to work and how he thinks of it, like this place shares the same space with Donghae's bakery and he thinks about him fondly even though he's coming back to be prostitute... I love how heartbreaking it sounds..
I love in the second part how Henry tells Hyukjae's story and how Donghae gets angry and he remembers his first time in red light districts. I actually made my boyfriend to read this little part from my translation ("look! Just look how amazing she writes!!") because it was so good how he was scared, but still ended up in bed with Hyukjae because Hyukjae was just so amazing mueheheheh
And in the same part, RED LIPS! Seriously, that was such a good scene! I felt all of this, the Donghae's sadness and his jealousy and inside conflicts... Ah, my memories. I remember how I felt nervous during that scene. I clearly felt how sad it was to have such a beautiful person in front of you and how disturbing it is to think that this person was just making out with somebody else…for money.
The third part is their life stories and it was all good but the best was how you managed to put their (especially Donghae's) denial, like he was not going to end up with Hyukjae, he was in love but he was going to leave him some day with no regrets but he didn't remember about his plan when he was waiting for Hyukjae to show up. And second, how you explained Hyukjae's feelings toward his job... This was great. No breaking minds, nothing pathological, just pure money and sense of power. I love it! And still, he let himself to think this beautiful thing: I never knew it could be like this until I met you.
Part four... I'll only say that I was amazed how Donghae was sure that Hyukjae is hurt and it actually turned out to be true. I was sure the explanation of his absence is going be different.. But it showed how Donghae trusted Hyukjae and he knew the other wouldn't leave him like that.. And there’s their fight. It was amazing, such a good scene, I was all nervous and sad, I bite all of my nails.. And if I can comment about translation problems, I was thinking for whole 4 days how to translate the last sentence coming from Donghae's mouths (the one about whorish life..) because I wanted so badly to sound as good and harsh and heartbreaking in Polish. After reading this fic so many times (well, if not counting translating process that would be about 30 times..) this scene still amazes me. I felt so bad for Hyukjae. He was so hurt, you know. You did this scene so perfectly, because they both wanted to be close to each other at the moment AND yet they end up broken. Amazing… When Hyukjae said that he only wanted to be held for Donghae and Donghae then said fuck you… This was just unbelievable how sad, yet somehow beautiful it all sounded.
AND! I really need to thank you for part five which you made from Hyukjae’s POV, because first I don’t think I would like to have sobbing Donghae through the whole chapter, and second I really love Hyukjae in it. He is just.. stunning, you know? Sorry for saying that, but he suffers beautifully. He isn’t this messy ball of misery; he is proud and really hard, he can get over everything, even if Donghae was little piece of shit, he hurt him and didn’t understand him and yet Hyukjae is saying such good things about him to Pierre. “He's the first person I've ever felt passion for” – I think it’s my favourite line from the whole story. And when Donghae comes to his apartment I was hoping for happy ending right there. But no, you did something even better. The whole scene which begins with this awful sex act with no emotions and Hyukjae lies there so submissively.. Really, I have no words for it. It was much much worse than Donghae saying those harsh words before, because I almost felt how disappointed Hyukjae had to be.. Really, I don’t know how Donghae went this far, but I wanted to slap him really hard.
But for the reader it’s even better, because later when they make love it’s even more beautiful, you know. And how they can’t get enough of each other, how they need to be close and they say those I love yous and you know.. This scene was so freaking great! My heart melted to the floor.